handbag tidy
handbag tidy
Is this piece of writing grammatically correct?
This is just a wrtiing exercise to help improve my grammar and flow in my writing.Can you please give me some constructive critisism thanks.It's not meant to be a story.
writing exercise 3
The little old lady wears white gloves and a beige overcoat.
She is neat and tidy as a hatpin.
Off she goes shuffling slowly down the street, carrying her black leather handbag, the one with the gold clasp.
The last time I saw her go out with that particular handbag, she returned sporting a new hairstyle.I will assume that she is off to the hairdressers again.I hope she does't get that purple hair rinse in her hair this time, it is very unflattering.
Now i shall go and make some scones, it will be a while before she returns.I hope this time i get the courage to ask her over for tea.
The end
thanks for your feedback:):):)
thank you very much mister dream master.Those corrections made a huge difference to how the piece flowed.:):):)
Off she goes, [added comma] shuffling slowly down the street [removed comma] carrying her black leather handbag, the one with the gold clasp.
The last time I saw her go out with that particular handbag, she returned sporting a new hairstyle. [added space] I will assume that she is off to the hairdressers again.[added space] I hope she doesn[added "n"]'t get that purple hair rinse in her hair this time, it is very unflattering.
Now I shall go and make some scones, it will be a while before she returns.[added space] I hope this time I get the courage to ask her over for tea.
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Thwere is not a lot of errors. You just need to reread it a few times and watch the words. When you type "I", make sure you don't use "i" (lowercase). It does make a nice story, regardless.
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